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Blog / Finally, another poem worth putting up here

Thursday, 12 March 2009 at 19:36

Times lately have been so troubled
I have now been truly humbled
As so many rights have turned wrong
As lonely nights grow ever so long

My links to joy have become less
Losing all that I know does depress
I know I could leave this world now
They would all be happier somehow

Any sense of relief I could find
would, to the truth, make me blind
When ignorance can truly be bliss
From memories I sorely miss

As my days have now grown darker
The light by which I see grows starker
I can look to when I was so high
And give the faintest whisper...Goodbye


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  • http://netlog.com/leena44melanie koopmanskoopmansmelanieleena44http://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/026/969/26969001.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia leena44 16

    melanie koopmans (Saturday, 21 March 2009 at 23:02)

    - Dev_S:
    - leena44:
    - Dev_S:
    - leena44:
    i like this one to, you have major talent. shesh if i could write like you,daumm.:)


    lol. anybody can write. I don't see what's so special about what i write
    I just write emotionally. that's all

    beacuse, you get lost in what your reading, in a good way thought, it makes you really think about the effort that was put in to the poem. i cant write worth shit,:)


    I get lost or you get lost? i'm the writer you're the reader :) haha
    and it's not really effort, so much as I'm just letting my emotions hold my pencil, and letting them go to work on my paper

    No, anyone could read it, and they think about whats being said, devon, i could sit all day and not write one thing. so thats effort, or, you have writing skill.


  • http://netlog.com/Dev_SDevon ScottScottDevonDev_Shttp://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/026/512/26512132.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia Dev_S 17

    Devon Scott (Saturday, 21 March 2009 at 23:00)

    - leena44:
    - Dev_S:
    - leena44:
    i like this one to, you have major talent. shesh if i could write like you,daumm.:)


    lol. anybody can write. I don't see what's so special about what i write
    I just write emotionally. that's all

    beacuse, you get lost in what your reading, in a good way thought, it makes you really think about the effort that was put in to the poem. i cant write worth shit,:)


    I get lost or you get lost? i'm the writer you're the reader :) haha
    and it's not really effort, so much as I'm just letting my emotions hold my pencil, and letting them go to work on my paper


  • http://netlog.com/leena44melanie koopmanskoopmansmelanieleena44http://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/026/969/26969001.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia leena44 16

    melanie koopmans (Saturday, 21 March 2009 at 22:57)

    - Dev_S:
    - leena44:
    i like this one to, you have major talent. shesh if i could write like you,daumm.:)


    lol. anybody can write. I don't see what's so special about what i write
    I just write emotionally. that's all

    beacuse, you get lost in what your reading, in a good way thought, it makes you really think about the effort that was put in to the poem. i cant write worth shit,:)


  • http://netlog.com/Dev_SDevon ScottScottDevonDev_Shttp://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/026/512/26512132.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia Dev_S 17

    Devon Scott (Saturday, 21 March 2009 at 22:49)

    - leena44:
    i like this one to, you have major talent. shesh if i could write like you,daumm.:)


    lol. anybody can write. I don't see what's so special about what i write
    I just write emotionally. that's all


  • http://netlog.com/leena44melanie koopmanskoopmansmelanieleena44http://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/026/969/26969001.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia leena44 16

    melanie koopmans (Saturday, 21 March 2009 at 22:48)

    i like this one to, you have major talent. shesh if i could write like you,daumm.:)


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    reva marie (Saturday, 21 March 2009 at 08:29)

    wow........ :)


  • http://netlog.com/XxLittleFootxX♥иασмι-נєωєℓ♥♥иασмι-נєωєℓ♥XxLittleFootxXhttp://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/022/909/22909197.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia XxLittleFootxX 19

    ♥иασмι-נєωєℓ♥ (Friday, 20 March 2009 at 18:53)

    - Dev_S:
    - XxLittleFootxX:
    - Dev_S:
    - XxLittleFootxX:
    Welcomes.
    I hope they become happier. :)
    Happy is like.. a box of chocolates.
    Both are comforting. :)


    lmfao but you can't eat happiness :)

    Sure you can.. Chocolates are happy. But then again... So are alot of things.


    hmm that's true lol
    but happiness itself, the emotion, isn't edible :)

    I know it's not. But sometimes.. Thats ok. We can't be greedy.. We have to share the happiness.


  • http://netlog.com/Dev_SDevon ScottScottDevonDev_Shttp://en.netlogstatic.com/p/tt/026/512/26512132.jpgCanadaBritish Columbia Dev_S 17

    Devon Scott (Friday, 20 March 2009 at 18:07)

    - XxLittleFootxX:
    - Dev_S:
    - XxLittleFootxX:
    Welcomes.
    I hope they become happier. :)
    Happy is like.. a box of chocolates.
    Both are comforting. :)


    lmfao but you can't eat happiness :)

    Sure you can.. Chocolates are happy. But then again... So are alot of things.


    hmm that's true lol
    but happiness itself, the emotion, isn't edible :)


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    Rei (Friday, 20 March 2009 at 00:50)

    - Dev_S:
    - AdmiredDisorder:
    well thought out rhyming couplet
    life is always troubling isn't it?
    if it wasn't I guess we would never have had the blues or deep poetry
    a tragedy can be beautiful too even shakespeare wrote some
    great poem


    whoa thanks.
    this is true. shakespeare wrote to many plays and poems to even count. I just wonder where he got his inspiration
    thanks :)


    a life of wondering "why?" possibly
    Did any of the really popular writers we all learn from in school have perfect lives?
    >.> personally I think "perfection" or "normal" are two completely undefinable terms in everyday lifestyles
    and if it is definable in someone's lifestyle... then they probably never wrote anything deep like this
    the perfect mind comes from an imperfect lifestyle and plenty of time to think it all over
    or somethin like that :3


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    ♥иασмι-נєωєℓ♥ (Thursday, 19 March 2009 at 21:47)

    - Dev_S:
    - XxLittleFootxX:
    Welcomes.
    I hope they become happier. :)
    Happy is like.. a box of chocolates.
    Both are comforting. :)


    lmfao but you can't eat happiness :)

    Sure you can.. Chocolates are happy. But then again... So are alot of things.


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